Rochelle Wisoff-Fields Friday Fictionerss challenges writers to write a complete story from being, middle and ending in 100 words or less, from the prompt picture. I'm taking her up on her challenge.
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“ Do you know this woman?”
Elizabeth Snow’s bloody body, lay before me as
I stood between the detectives.
I could still feel her hand on my knee, the day I hacked into the global health care network for
her, so she could find a way to kill Cendercorp’s CEO for his crimes against
humanity.
Cendercorp announced
yesterday that they’re holding Elizabeth in connection to his murder, so how did she
get here, in the middle of nowhere.
I knew Cendercorp couldn’t
trace my hack, yet I felt guilty for turning my back on the woman of my dreams.
“No.”
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This is a revision.12/15/2014
Copyright © 2014 Glynis Rankin
I'l admit to being a bit confused by this - it's not immediately clear that we're jumping into a flashback with the hand on the knee bit, but more, I wasn't clear whether the detectives are showing him a photo or a body. A little more setting would be nice.
ReplyDeleteI like the mystery, though, I got the feeling this could be part of something much bigger.
Looks like a good story but I'm confused by the last para. Does it need rewriting?
ReplyDeleteDear Glynis,
ReplyDeleteI, too am confused by the last paragraph.
Shalom,
Rochelle