My 333 word story this week, is Snowman's Revenge. I hope you will enjoy
Roger couldn’t sleep;
it wasn’t because he’d spent the day playing in the snow, before pummeling,
with great joy, a snowman that Paul from across the street had taken time to
build. What kept him awake were the clawing sounds at
his window. He knew something tried to get in, but every time he looked out he
didn’t see anything but the thrashed snow across the street where some dog had peed.
He had gone to his
parent’s room twice already to tell them he couldn’t sleep because of the sound.
“It’s just the wind sweetheart,” his mother said, “causing the tree limbs to
bang against your window, that’s all.”
” You’re too old to believe in ghost, son,” his father added
with a touch of humor. He never said
it was a ghost; whatever clawed at his window was real.
Seeing his fear, she hugged him.
“Sweetie, it will be alright we’re right here nothing’s going to happen to you.” She kissed him before
he returned to his room.
Roger covered his
head as the scraping sounds grew louder. In the dark of his room, those tree
limbs looked like hands scratching to get inside. He was ten but at that moment he wanted his
Mommy.
Suddenly the sounds stopped, but
the wind still howled like some creature in pain.Roger steeled himself before peeping out from under the
covers. That’s when he saw the long shadow of a man creeping through his window.
Roger quickly jumped out of the bed and grabbed the first
thing he found, his thick wool coat. He threw it in the direction of the man
and ran from the room, yelling for his parents.
“Someone’s in the house!”
When the police
investigated, they found just Roger’s coat and an unusually large yellow puddle on his floor. They all turned to the ten year old for answers.
“Someone was here,” Roger protested. “It was,…it
was Paul’s Snowman, he must’ve melted.”
"Sweetie." Mommy gaze melt "We all have accidents."
Thank you.....Trifecta
Copyright © 2013 Glynis Rankin
Chilling
ReplyDeleteThank you Kylie!
DeleteI love the vengeful snowman. Very...um...COOL!
ReplyDeleteHa Ha! Thank you Illsa!
DeleteOh this made me remember of my childhood days of sleeping away from my parents and sneaking into their room at every little sound. Beautifully done, Glynis!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much theinnerzone! Your comments always bring joy, you are one of my favorite writers.
DeleteWell crafted.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much yarnspinnerr!
DeleteI love the ending line here. My cats are batting at the door, demanding to be let in on this 17 degree night.
ReplyDeleteWow, now that's cold. Thank you Kelly!
DeleteOh my gosh, this was too funny. I bet he never, ever destroys a snowman again! (And never lives down the humiliation of his parents thinking he peed on the floor...)
ReplyDeleteHa ha! So true Janna!
DeleteI had a brothers who walked in their sleep until they were about thirteen. They would peep in the kitchen trashcan most every night, it was so humiliating for them and we never let them live it down.
Crime and Punishment.. don't do the crime if you can't do the time. 'Cool' story. Kept me at the window waiting for the answer. I like that he threw his coat at the interloper. Great details..
ReplyDeleteThe law of the land, steph!
DeleteSo glad you enjoyed this story. Thank you!
Haha Reminds me of a dream when I had to pee...
ReplyDeleteGot the tension pitch perfect, and the best answer to keep Roger awake night after night!
Love the wind howling like a creature in pain.
That dream is universal....ha ha! Roger is the type of kid that would need reminding.
DeleteThanks Kymm
This was very,very scary and I loved it :D
ReplyDeleteAwww. Thank you so much Atreyee!
DeleteEeek. That is *creepy.* And funny. :) Nice job!
ReplyDeleteI love that reaction.....Thank you so much!
DeleteThis was well told.. very well told.. I was gnawing on my nails when reading this... ha great things.
ReplyDeleteOh Bjorn, thank you! Your comments means so much!
DeleteThat Frosty guy was just a front for the Snowmen Mafia, you know. Scary buildup, funny ending!
ReplyDeleteHa Ha! Snowman Mafia....I love that!!!
DeleteThank you TMW!
Glynis, I love the sense of humor in this piece! ("We all have accidents"-that is too funny!!) So awesome! You did an amazing, amazing job, my friend!!
ReplyDeleteWow! Thank you so much Valerie!
DeleteI commented yesterday from my phone but looks like it didn't post.
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job building the tension. The tree limbs reminded me of a creepy scene in Poltergeist. I didn't expect the humorous ending. Had fun reading this. :)
I'm so glad you came back to add your lovely comment Ivy!
DeleteThank you so much!
I had rhododendrons outside my bedroom window as a kid that would scratch the window just like this and terrified me to no end. Great story, Glynis!
ReplyDeleteI had a hugh Oak near my window, scared me the same way. Thanks Momo
DeleteI always worry that one of my son's irrational monster fears is actually real and I don't believe him like every other non-believing parent in kid's movies.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
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